Recommended by Ricochet Members Created with Sketch. The End of the End

 

“It’s the beginning of the end,” Steve said;
I knew it wasn’t. I had known for weeks
The end was on its way. We all are dead
Awaiting our moment as the days leak
Away from us. For some the time is close.
Our modern world knows the signs: hospital,
Home, hospital, home again. Higher dose
Of medication does nothing at all.
If Dad hangs on until Tuesday, I’m free
To travel for a funeral, but will he?
My plans will change, not unexpectedly.
It’s a long, hard drive to South Missouri.
The chapter ends after a good, long age.
We’re left behind to fill another page.

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  1. Arahant Member
    Arahant

    And then, it was done.

    • #1
    • June 21, 2019, at 10:18 AM PDT
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  2. Gary McVey Contributor
    Gary McVey Joined in the first year of Ricochet Ricochet Charter Member

    Very nice, Arahant.

    • #2
    • June 21, 2019, at 11:25 AM PDT
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  3. KentForrester Moderator

    I’m out of tune with almost all contemporary poetry, but I like yours, Arahant. And I’m not just saying that because you always answer the questions I pester you with.

    No, no, not at all. I really like your sonnet, despite its unorthodox rhyme scheme (ABAB CDCD EEEE FF) and a couple of suspicious rhymes (weeks/leak and hospital/at all. You did get that traditional couplet at the end of the four stanza sonnet, though. 

    But I suppose you young people think that breaking the rules is hep, or boss, or dank — or whatever you young people call it nowadays.

     

     

    • #3
    • June 21, 2019, at 1:16 PM PDT
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  4. Arahant Member
    Arahant

    KentForrester (View Comment):
    suspicious rhymes (weeks/leak

    I thought about weeks/leeks, but that would have given a whole different odor to the situation.

    • #4
    • June 21, 2019, at 1:18 PM PDT
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  5. Matt Balzer, Imperialist Claw Member

    KentForrester (View Comment):
    a couple of suspicious rhymes

    He was caught in a trap.

    • #5
    • June 22, 2019, at 5:43 PM PDT
    • 3 likes
  6. Steve C. Member

    KentForrester (View Comment):
    hep

    A call back to the Jazz Era? 

    • #6
    • June 23, 2019, at 6:02 AM PDT
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  7. Arahant Member
    Arahant

    And, back from Missouri.

    • #7
    • June 26, 2019, at 1:17 PM PDT
    • 4 likes
  8. KentForrester Moderator

    Arahant (View Comment):

    And, back from Missouri.

    Arahant, don’t leave like that. You know I miss your comments when you’re gone.

    • #8
    • June 26, 2019, at 1:22 PM PDT
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  9. Matt Balzer, Imperialist Claw Member

    KentForrester (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):

    And, back from Missouri.

    Arahant, don’t leave like that. You know I miss your comments when you’re gone.

    He’s got like 80000. You can always go back and read the old ones.

    • #9
    • June 26, 2019, at 1:25 PM PDT
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  10. Arahant Member
    Arahant

    He’s right, you know. 80,980 at the moment. But for you, Kent, I’ll tell the rest of my family members they’re just not allowed to die.

    • #10
    • June 26, 2019, at 1:54 PM PDT
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  11. Gary McVey Contributor
    Gary McVey Joined in the first year of Ricochet Ricochet Charter Member

    The sonnet is poignant but a bit elliptical. Someone who doesn’t follow you online may not know that you were referring to a real, and current moment of pain. I don’t think Kent understood. Good to have you back with us, Arahant. 

    • #11
    • June 26, 2019, at 2:02 PM PDT
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  12. Arahant Member
    Arahant

    Kent’s okay, Gary. Just a little back-and-forth.

    • #12
    • June 26, 2019, at 2:13 PM PDT
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  13. KentForrester Moderator

    Arahant (View Comment):

    Kent’s okay, Gary. Just a little back-and-forth.

    Arahant, I didn’t know. Sorry.

    • #13
    • June 26, 2019, at 2:25 PM PDT
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  14. Arahant Member
    Arahant

    KentForrester (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):

    Kent’s okay, Gary. Just a little back-and-forth.

    Arahant, I didn’t know. Sorry.

    That’s alright, Kent. Think of it as having one less person in the world who is older than you.

    • #14
    • June 26, 2019, at 2:28 PM PDT
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