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  1. Hartmann von Aue Member
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    This is really quite good “crowns and crests of chop” – excellent.

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  2. Arahant Member
    Arahant
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    Hartmann von Aue (View Comment):
    This is really quite good “crowns and crests of chop” – excellent.

    I am honored, sir.

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  3. Arahant Member
    Arahant
    @Arahant

    I’ll go ahead and put the plain text here:

    Riding waves of water crestlets.
    Golden, garish. gleaming warriors
    Sift the sun that sits on high
    To blear the eye and blind the soul.

    Gentle winds with waves all dance.
    Shifting, shining shapes of glitter
    Channel, chortle, chuckle, and prance
    As pretty primal perturbations.

    The eye must squint and squeak out tears
    To see the shadows showing there
    Between the brilliant buoys of sunlight
    Between the crowns and crests of chop.

    Surface play, a seeming thing:
    For inches only under duck-paths
    Crystal calm cares nothing
    For sun or breezes brash delights.

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  4. Arahant Member
    Arahant
    @Arahant

    I wish one could format so well in the conversation starter/OP without resorting to graphics.

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  5. Trink Coolidge
    Trink
    @Trink

     

    “Surface play, a seeming thing:
    For inches only under duck-paths
    Crystal calm cares nothing
    For sun or breezes brash delights.”

    Like a fine wine, it finishes well.

    Perfectly.  Beautiful.

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  6. Arahant Member
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    Trink (View Comment):
    Like a fine wine, it finishes well.

    Perfectly. Beautiful.

    Thank you.

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  7. Trink Coolidge
    Trink
    @Trink

    Arahant, this poem is so filled with energy and keen observations.   It is told from a masculine perspective.   Years and years ago I wrote its sister poem.   Meek and mild :)

    It even features a duck.

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  8. Arahant Member
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    @Arahant

    Trink (View Comment):
    Arahant, this poem is so filled with energy and keen observations. It is told from a masculine perspective. Years and years ago I wrote its sister poem. Meek and mild ?

    It even features a duck.

    Alliterative accentual poetry tends to be much more heavily stressed, so does tend to seem more masculine. Of course, it came out of the same Germanic traditions that brought us the Vikings.

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  9. Susan Quinn Contributor
    Susan Quinn
    @SusanQuinn

    Loved this, Arahant. Brings back fond memories of the poetry series. The series was hard for me as we moved forward (or maybe I just got lazy), but it was great fun; it stretched my prose chops to poetry. Thanks for this poem and all your fine work.

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  10. Nanda Panjandrum Member
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    Thanks for a spot to stroll!

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  11. Snirtler Inactive
    Snirtler
    @Snirtler

    You once gave me poetry-writing advice. Thanks for the examples of enjambment here.

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  12. Boss Mongo Member
    Boss Mongo
    @BossMongo

    Outstanding.  Thank you, ‘Hant.

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  13. RightAngles Member
    RightAngles
    @RightAngles

    Gentle winds with waves all dance.
    Shifting, shining shapes of glitter

    and then:
    Crystal calm

    Really good imagery, Arahant.

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  14. Belt Member
    Belt
    @Belt

    Very nice, Arahant.  Reflective, I would say.  Reminds me of old English alliterative poetry crossed with Walt Whitman.

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  15. JS Coolidge
    JS
    @JulieSnapp

    Arahant (View Comment):
    I wish one could format so well in the conversation starter/OP without resorting to graphics.

    If you hit Shift + Enter
    you get lines like this

    instead of like this when you press Enter.

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  16. Arahant Member
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    Susan Quinn (View Comment):
    Loved this, Arahant. Brings back fond memories of the poetry series. The series was hard for me as we moved forward (or maybe I just got lazy), but it was great fun; it stretched my prose chops to poetry. Thanks for this poem and all your fine work.

    Ah, that series never ends. I will revive it soon.

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  17. Arahant Member
    Arahant
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    JS (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):
    I wish one could format so well in the conversation starter/OP without resorting to graphics.

    If you hit Shift + Enter
    you get lines like this

    instead of like this when you press Enter.

    Have you tried doing so in a conversation you started in the OP? As soon as one publishes, WordPress converts those to full paragraphs. It does not do so in the comments, but only in the original post.

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  18. Grosseteste Thatcher
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    An excellent contribution, thank you!


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  19. Rick Poach Inactive
    Rick Poach
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    Verse on the Ricochet Main Page?

    Well done, Arahant.

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  20. JS Coolidge
    JS
    @JulieSnapp

    Arahant (View Comment):

    JS (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):
    I wish one could format so well in the conversation starter/OP without resorting to graphics.

    If you hit Shift + Enter
    you get lines like this

    instead of like this when you press Enter.

    Have you tried doing so in a conversation you started in the OP? As soon as one publishes, WordPress converts those to full paragraphs. It does not do so in the comments, but only in the original post.

    I guess not. I don’t start conversations very often, but I’ll try it soon.

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  21. RightAngles Member
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    JS (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):

    JS (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):
    I wish one could format so well in the conversation starter/OP without resorting to graphics.

    If you hit Shift + Enter
    you get lines like this

    instead of like this when you press Enter.

    Have you tried doing so in a conversation you started in the OP? As soon as one publishes, WordPress converts those to full paragraphs. It does not do so in the comments, but only in the original post.

    I guess not. I don’t start conversations very often, but I’ll try it soon.

    Do it! It’s fun!

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  22. JS Coolidge
    JS
    @JulieSnapp

    RightAngles (View Comment):

    JS (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):

    JS (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):
    I wish one could format so well in the conversation starter/OP without resorting to graphics.

    If you hit Shift + Enter
    you get lines like this

    instead of like this when you press Enter.

    Have you tried doing so in a conversation you started in the OP? As soon as one publishes, WordPress converts those to full paragraphs. It does not do so in the comments, but only in the original post.

    I guess not. I don’t start conversations very often, but I’ll try it soon.

    Do it! It’s fun!

    I’ve been signing up for the monthly things so I can have something to write about! :)

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  23. RightAngles Member
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    JS (View Comment):

    RightAngles (View Comment):

    JS (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):

    JS (View Comment):

    Arahant (View Comment):
    I wish one could format so well in the conversation starter/OP without resorting to graphics.

    If you hit Shift + Enter
    you get lines like this

    instead of like this when you press Enter.

    Have you tried doing so in a conversation you started in the OP? As soon as one publishes, WordPress converts those to full paragraphs. It does not do so in the comments, but only in the original post.

    I guess not. I don’t start conversations very often, but I’ll try it soon.

    Do it! It’s fun!

    I’ve been signing up for the monthly things so I can have something to write about! ?

    That’s a great way to get your feet wet.

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