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Group Writing, Water: Lake under Sun and Breezes
This is really quite good “crowns and crests of chop” – excellent.
I am honored, sir.
I’ll go ahead and put the plain text here:
Riding waves of water crestlets.
Golden, garish. gleaming warriors
Sift the sun that sits on high
To blear the eye and blind the soul.
Gentle winds with waves all dance.
Shifting, shining shapes of glitter
Channel, chortle, chuckle, and prance
As pretty primal perturbations.
The eye must squint and squeak out tears
To see the shadows showing there
Between the brilliant buoys of sunlight
Between the crowns and crests of chop.
Surface play, a seeming thing:
For inches only under duck-paths
Crystal calm cares nothing
For sun or breezes brash delights.
I wish one could format so well in the conversation starter/OP without resorting to graphics.
“Surface play, a seeming thing:
For inches only under duck-paths
Crystal calm cares nothing
For sun or breezes brash delights.”
Like a fine wine, it finishes well.
Perfectly. Beautiful.
Thank you.
Arahant, this poem is so filled with energy and keen observations. It is told from a masculine perspective. Years and years ago I wrote its sister poem. Meek and mild :)
It even features a duck.
Alliterative accentual poetry tends to be much more heavily stressed, so does tend to seem more masculine. Of course, it came out of the same Germanic traditions that brought us the Vikings.
Loved this, Arahant. Brings back fond memories of the poetry series. The series was hard for me as we moved forward (or maybe I just got lazy), but it was great fun; it stretched my prose chops to poetry. Thanks for this poem and all your fine work.
Thanks for a spot to stroll!
You once gave me poetry-writing advice. Thanks for the examples of enjambment here.
Outstanding. Thank you, ‘Hant.
Gentle winds with waves all dance.
Shifting, shining shapes of glitter
and then:
Crystal calm
Really good imagery, Arahant.
Very nice, Arahant. Reflective, I would say. Reminds me of old English alliterative poetry crossed with Walt Whitman.
If you hit Shift + Enter
you get lines like this
instead of like this when you press Enter.
Ah, that series never ends. I will revive it soon.
Have you tried doing so in a conversation you started in the OP? As soon as one publishes, WordPress converts those to full paragraphs. It does not do so in the comments, but only in the original post.
An excellent contribution, thank you!
This conversation is part of a Group Writing series with the theme “Water”, planned for the whole month of April. If you follow this link, there’s more information about Group Writing. The schedule is updated to include links to the other conversations for the month as they are posted. May’s topic is Winning, please sign up!
Verse on the Ricochet Main Page?
Well done, Arahant.
I guess not. I don’t start conversations very often, but I’ll try it soon.
Do it! It’s fun!
I’ve been signing up for the monthly things so I can have something to write about! :)
That’s a great way to get your feet wet.